Hello world. Want to hear what is exciting? I think I have a title. This is a big deal, in case some one who hasn't had this problem is reading this. And I am very excited. Hence me asking if you wanted to hear what is exciting.
Do you want to hear what it is? Because if you keep reading you will find out. At least you will hear some of the options. And then you will have to tell me what your thoughts are.
And now, with out further ado, the working title(s):
The Things You (Just) Don't Say
or
The Things You (Just) Won't Say
or
The Things You (Just) Can't Say
As you can see, I have the basic idea down. I just can't decide if I like the word just in there, which would be why I have it in parenthesizes in there. And I can't decide between won't, don't and can't.
See won't is very applicable. There are a lot of things concerning all of their pasts that they simply will not say. They could, and they possibly should, say them. They simply won't.
The don't is also very applicable. There are so many things that they (and when I say they, I am mostly talking about Hilary.) don't say. Things that they want people to know, things that they need to get out, that they don't say because they are worried that people won't listen, or care.
And again, the can't say is very applicable. Some of the things in there past, or even there present, mostly the things I referred to previously, are things that they simply cannot say. Whether it is because of loyalties or because they are not ready to admit them out loud.
And so I will give this deep thought, and I will read the one comment that mike will leave when I tell him to, and I will make a decision.
And by the way, Heather would be so proud, I capitalized every single word that should be capitalized. I did it only because she complained to me about my capitalizing habits and it pained me to break my habit for a few moments.
Fair thee well.
Taylor
2 comments:
I think that ultimately it comes down to the tense of each of your characters and which of THOSE is most applicable. If you break up the contractions that you have, it's "do not", "will not", and "cannot". The first two are essentially the same, it's simply a matter of present tense and future tense. Also, those two options are showing your audience that the characters (and audience) have a choice, as opposed to the last one implying we don't. Using "can't" could be really powerful, to me at least, but I don't know your characters very well. "Can't" usually resonates with audiences really well because it feels so limiting. It provides the reader with a deeper emotional connection to the characters because they feel just as trapped as the character feels with the desire to say something, but they can't, and that's all there is to it. Personally, I think the title would be stronger without the "Just" only because it seems more casual and easygoing filler word, but maybe that's what you're going for so I don't know. I'm really not much help since I don't know your story, but all this typing is just my opinion, do with it what you will.
I very much like your blog by the way. I hope you're doing well. :)
Thank you very much for your consideration of my complaining. I feel loved.
In my opinion, if you're going to do it without the "just", then do "The Things You Won't Say". But with the just, do "The Things You Just Can't Say". Personally though, I like "won't" the best. It sounds a lot less like a list of things people in general can't/don't say and more like an actual book title.
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